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Author: TheGiraffe3

data/jibauni/jibauni 0 kanlanmo transport.txt

@@ -105,12 +105,12 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 0"
 			label hostilealpha
 			`	"If you need something to do, I have something. I have been looking for transport to <planet> in the <system> system, but so far no Jibauni captain has wanted to take Kanlanmo, which happens to be my name. I will explain, once we get there."`
 			choice
-				`	"I'll take."`
+				`	"I'll take you."`
 					accept
 				`	"Of course I'd be happy to, but unfortunately there's no space on <ship> right now. I can come back later though."`
 			action
 				set "jibauni: will take kanlanmo later"
-			`	"Good," says Kanlanmo. "Chances are, I still won't have found transport, so I will be waiting here next time you come."`
+			`	"Good," says Kanlanmo. "Chances are, I still will not have found transport, so I will be waiting here next time you come."`
 				decline
 			label notseen
 			`	"Good. In that case, I have another request for you. Can you take me to <planet> in the <system> system? I will mark it on your map, and explain more once we get there. Oh yes, and my name is Kanlanmo. Kanlanmo of the Jibauni."`
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo (0 declined)"
 		has "jibauni: will take kanlanmo later"
 	on offer
 		conversation
-			`Kanlanmo hails you as you land. "You couldn't take me to <planet> last time, but can you now?"`
+			`Kanlanmo hails you as you land. "You could not take me to <planet> last time, but can you now?"`
 			choice
 				`	"Yes, certainly!"`
 					accept
@@ -226,7 +226,7 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo (0 declined)"
 		set "license: Jibauni"
 		event "jibauni translated hails"
 		conversation
-			`As you land Kanlanmo says, "I've got an urgent meeting to get to. Thank you for bringing me. The meeting will be over in about an hour, so if you want to hear about it, meet me in the spaceport then. Oh, and before I forget, here is <payment> and a translator for your pains."`
+			`As you land Kanlanmo says, "I have an urgent meeting to get to. Thank you for bringing me. The meeting will be over in about an hour, so if you want to hear about it, meet me in the spaceport then. Oh, and before I forget, here is <payment> and a translator for your pains."`
 
 mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 1"
 	name "Kanlanmo to <planet>"
@@ -303,7 +303,7 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 1"
 			`	"I would rather not tell you," he replies. "I believe it is a secret kept from less advanced races such as yours, and most of mine."`
 				goto choice
 			label jd
-			`	"There have been ships with Jump Drives here. One kidnapped an Oracle, and there have been other strange ships around. Anyway, I know not much, so don't ask me more about that subject."`
+			`	"There have been ships with Jump Drives here. One kidnapped an Oracle, and there have been other strange ships around. Anyway, I know not much, so do not ask me more about that subject."`
 				goto choice
 			label language
 			action
@@ -321,15 +321,15 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 1"
 			label rebellicense
 			action
 				set "jibauni knowledge: rebel fighter license"
-			`	"I believe that for most of them, fighting the Rebel faction to the east will give you the license. I would recommend doing that if you want to 'curry favor', would it be called? For the more important one, I'll give you a call when you've assisted us enough."`
+			`	"I believe that for most of them, fighting the Rebel faction to the east will give you the license. I would recommend doing that if you want to curry favor', would it be called? For the more important one, I will give you a call when you have assisted us enough."`
 				goto choice
 			label done
 			`	"Good. Without more questions, I can ask if you will lend some help getting to <system>; <planet>, to be precise. Would you take me?"`
 			choice
 				`	"Sure!"`
 				`	"Not right now, sorry. But I'll come back soon."`
 					decline
-			`	"Thank you for being willing to take me. I'll be in your ship soon."`
+			`	"Thank you for being willing to take me. I will be in your ship soon."`
 				to display
 					or
 						not "jibauni come"
@@ -338,7 +338,7 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 1"
 						not "jibauni language question"
 				accept
 			label manyquestions
-			`	"You asked many questions indeed. Also, let me thank you for being willing to take me. I'll be in your ship soon."`
+			`	"You asked many questions indeed. Also, let me thank you for being willing to take me. I will be in your ship soon."`
 				to display
 					has "jibauni come"
 					has "jibauni purple"
@@ -436,7 +436,7 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo books elsewhere"
 		not "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 3: offered"
 	on offer
 		conversation
-			`A call comes in from Kanlanmo the moment you get reception. He sounds quite angry as he yells, "You were supposed to meet me in the spaceport of <destination>! I'm late for an important meeting now!"`
+			`A call comes in from Kanlanmo the moment you get reception. He sounds quite angry as he yells, "You were supposed to meet me in the spaceport of <destination>! I am late for an important meeting now!"`
 			choice
 				`	"I had other things to do."`
 				`	"Does it really matter?"`
@@ -445,7 +445,7 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo books elsewhere"
 				`	(Cut off the call.)`
 					goto cutoff
 			label doesntmatter
-			`	"Yes, it does. It doesn't matter what else needed to happen, this takes priority. A small Rebel Furus? Preposterous compared to what's going on here!"`
+			`	"So? It matters very deeply; no matter what else needed to happen, this takes priority. A small Rebel Furus? Preposterous compared to what is going on here!"`
 				goto end
 			label rude
 			`	"Because you said that you liked the Jibauni. It seems that you loathe us as much as the Rebels do!"`
@@ -465,8 +465,8 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo books elsewhere"
 				"reputation: Jibauni" = 0
 				"reputation: Jibauni (Civilian)" = 0
 				"reputation: Jibauni (Rebel)" += 10
-			`	"I will book another transport, but I don't think I'll ever contact you again."`
-			`	It seems as if you won't be able to work with the Jibauni anymore. At least they aren't angry enough to attack you.`
+			`	"I will book another transport, but I do not think I will ever contact you again."`
+			`	It seems as if you will not be able to work with Kanlanmo anymore. At least he isn't angry enough to tell the Jibauni to attack you.`
 				decline
 
 mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 3"
@@ -494,28 +494,21 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 3"
 				`	"I'm kind of busy, can we talk later?"`
 					goto destination
 			label question
-			`	"The insane people here won't furnish a good fleet," he says. "Not to blame them, because they do have a life that does not include fighting, but we were counting on most of our help from here. Now, we're going to need more from other worlds."`
+			`	"The insane people here will not furnish a good fleet," he says. "Not to blame them, because they do have a life that does not include fighting, but we were counting on most of our help from here. Now, we are going to need more from other worlds."`
 			choice
 				`	"I have a large fleet, so I could help."`
 					to display
 						"total ships" > 10
-					goto fleetlarge
 				`	"My fleet is not large, but it can fight the Rebel Jibauni."`
 					to display
 						and
 							"total ships" < 10
 							"total ships" > 1
 					goto fleetsmall
 				`	"My ship can help."`
-					to display
-						not "flagship model: Puffin" # any other ships that can't fight should be added here
 					goto singleship
 				`	"That's sad."`
-					to display
-						or
-							has "flagship model: Puffin" # any other ships that can't fight should be added here
 					goto prechoicetake
-			label fleetlarge
 			`	"Great," he says. "I have seen your big fleet, and it does look powerful."`
 				goto thanksoffer
 			label fleetsmall
@@ -573,70 +566,58 @@ mission "Jibauni: Kanlanmo 4"
 			`	"No," says Kanlanmo. "You should meet Captain <last>. <first>, this is Kasim Aboagye. His company makes most of our fighters and warships."`
 			choice
 				`	"Pleased to meet you."`
-					goto shakehands
 				`	"What ships does he make?"`
 					goto ships
 				`	(Nod.)`
 					goto nod
-			label shakehands
 			`	He reaches out his hand, and you shake it. "What ships do your shipyards make?" you ask.`
 				goto ships
 			label nod
 			`	He nods back in acknowledgment. "What ships do you make?" you ask.`
-				goto ships
 			label ships
 			`	Kasim lights up. "Aboagye Shipyards makes quite a few ships," he says. "The only ones we do not make are the Yiyharsi, Saghir, and one or two other ships, which are made by the untrustwor-"`
 			`	Kanlanmo cuts in, "Did you want to hear about the results of the meeting?"`
 			choice
 				`	"Yes."`
 					goto meetingresults
 				`	"Kasim, what are the one or two other ships you do not make?"`
-					goto daybalmuraw
-			label daybalmuraw
-			`	"To be specific, the Daybal and the Muraw. The Daybal is a not-great cargo carrying drone, but the Muraw has a turret mount on a fighter. Those crazy people of Res-redi's Sh-" "The results of the meeting," `
-			`	"The results of the meeting," Kanlanmo says icily, "are that the leaders are very pleased. They didn't expect Hajay to contribute any ships at all, so the few promised are a great boon to them. Well, now you know. Anything else?"`
+			`	"To be specific, the Daybal and the Muraw. The Daybal is a not-great cargo carrying drone, but the Muraw has a turret mount on a fighter. Those crazy people of Res-redi's Sh-"`
+			`	"The results of the meeting," Kanlanmo says icily, "are that the leaders are very pleased. They did not expect Hajay to contribute any ships at all, so the few promised are a great boon to them. Well, now you know. Anything else?"`
 				goto ok
 			label meetingresults
-			`	"The leaders are very pleased. They didn't expect Hajay to contribute any ships at all, so the few promised are a great boon to them. Well, now you know. Anything else?"`
+			`	"The leaders are very pleased. They did not expect Hajay to contribute any ships at all, so the few promised are a great boon to them. Well, now you know. Anything else?"`
 			label ok
 			choice
 				`	"No questions."`
 					goto good
 				`	"What is this other shipyard called?"`
-					goto resredi
-			label resredi
-			`	"It's called Res-redi Shipyards. The quality of their ships is not high," replies Kasim. "And think of putting a turret mount on a fighter! Preposterous! The Res-redians have no idea of good ship design at all!"`
+			`	"It is called Res-redi Shipyards. The quality of their ships is not high," replies Kasim. "And think of putting a turret mount on a fighter! Preposterous! The Res-redians have no idea of good ship design at all!"`
 			`	"You very well know that if <first> keeps working with us, Resredi will have to be involved, Kasim," remarks Kanlanmo.`
-			`	"But <first>, will you volunteer to do some escort duty later, for the government? I'll call you when we're ready."`
+			`	"But <first>, will you volunteer to do some escort duty later, for the government? I will call you when we are ready."`
 			choice
 				`	"Sure."`
-					goto good
 				`	"No, I don't want to work with the Jibauni anymore."`
 					goto stripped
-			label good
-			`	"Great. I will report that, then." Kasim cuts in, "You are lucky you said yes! Kanlanmo is the Undersecretary of the Department of Defense, and he can command you. He didn't have to give you a choice."`
+			`	"Great. I will report that, then." Kasim cuts in, "You are lucky you said yes! Kanlanmo is the Undersecretary of the Department of Defense, and he can command you. He did not have to give you a choice."`
 			choice
 				`	"I had no idea you were so powerful!"`
-					goto power
 				`	"You mean I've been unknowingly transporting an important government official?"`
 					goto government
-			label power
-			`	"It isn't used the way you think, <last>," says Kanlanmo. "Thank you for saying yes, and now I have something to do." He hurries away."`
-			`	"Poor Kanlanmo," remarks Kasim. "He has been shy about his job ever since he was appointed to government office. I remember when-well, that's a story for another time. I too have something to do, so goodbye." He ambles away as you go back to your business.`
-				decline
+			`	"It is not used the way you think, <last>," says Kanlanmo. "Thank you for saying yes, and now I have something to do." He hurries away."`
+			`	"Poor Kanlanmo," remarks Kasim. "He has been shy about his job ever since he was appointed to government office. I remember when-well, that is a story for another time. I too have something to do, so goodbye." He ambles away as you go back to your business.`
+				accept
 			label government
 			`	"Yes, you have," says Kanlanmo. "Goodbye, I have something to do." He hurries away."`
-			`	"Poor Kanlanmo," remarks Kasim. "He has been shy about his job ever since he was appointed to government office. I remember when-well, that's a story for another time. I too have something to do, so goodbye." He ambles away as you go back to your business.`
-				decline
+			`	"Poor Kanlanmo," remarks Kasim. "He has been shy about his job ever since he was appointed to government office. I remember when-well, that is a story for another time. I too have something to do, so goodbye." He ambles away as you go back to your business.`
+				accept
 			label stripped
 			action
 				set "not working with jibauni"
+				log `Decided not to work with the Jibauni anymore.`
 			`	"Your, admittedly mistaken, choice. I will tell my colleagues."`
 				decline
 	on accept
 		log `It turns out that Kanlanmo is Undersecretary of the Jibauni Department of Defense.`
 		log "People" "Kanlanmo" `Kanlanmo is a Jibauni who is very worried about the defense of his species' systems. He apparently is Undersecretary of the Jibauni Department of Defense. Kanlanmo is also very shy about his job, according to Kasim Aboagye.`
-		log "People" "Kasim Aboagye" `Kasim is the owner of Aboagye Shipyards, which makes most of the Jibauni ships. He seems quite touchy about the other shipyards, called the Shipyards of Res-redi.`
+		log "People" "Kasim Aboagye" `Kasim is the owner of Aboagye Shipyards, which makes most of the Jibauni ships. He seems quite touchy about the other major shipyards, called the Shipyards of Res-redi.`
 		fail
-	on decline
-		log `Decided not to work with the Jibauni anymore.`

data/jibauni/jibauni culture conversations.txt

@@ -46,12 +46,12 @@
 		random < 60
 	on offer
 		conversation
-			`A Quyan lands shortly after <ship> touches down, but it seems to have more Jibauni disembarking than any normal Quyan could have. Do you want to go investigate?`
+			`A Quyan lands shortly after <ship> touches down, but it seems to have more Jibauni disembarking than any normal Quyan could have. Would you like to go investigate?`
 			choice
-				`	(Why not.)`
+				`	(Yes.)`
 				`	(No.)`
 					goto no
-			`	You walk up to the Quyan, whose name you notice is "C. S. Jandon". Indeed, the number of passengers is more than usual.`
+			`	You walk up to the Quyan, whose name you notice is "C. S. Jandon". It definitely has more disembarking passengers than usual.`
 			choice
 				`	"How do you fit so many Jibauni on board?"`
 				`	(Never mind. Get out of here before the captain notices you.)`
@@ -60,19 +60,15 @@
 			choice
 				`	"Why would you do that?"`
 				`	"I see."`
-			`	"I do it because the peaceful captain life is good enough for me. I don't need to go gallivanting around to strange places. I've been in Hajay my whole life, and enjoyed every bit of it. May I ask you a question?"`
+			`	"I do it because the peaceful captain life is good enough for me. I do not need to go gallivanting around to strange places; I have been in Hajay my whole life, and enjoyed every bit of it. May I ask you a question?"`
 			choice
 				`	"Sure."`
-					goto herquestion
 				`	"If you want."`
-					goto herquestion
 				`	"No thanks."`
 					goto nothanksship
-			label herquestion
 			`	"What is the name of your ship, <first>?"`
 			choice
 				`	"<ship>."`
-					goto toldship
 				`	"Wait. How do you know my name?"`
 					goto namequestion
 				`	"I thought you would know that I am Captain <first> <last> of the <ship>."`
@@ -86,45 +82,42 @@
 				`	"<ship>."`
 					goto toldship
 				`	"I thought you would know that I am Captain <first> <last> of the <ship>."`
-					goto thoughtyouknew
 			label thoughtyouknew
 			`	"Nope," the Jibauni replies merrily. "We common Jibauni only know your first and last names."`
-				goto whoyou
 			label whoyou
 			`	"What is your name?" you ask. "I am surprised you would want to know," is the answer. "But I am Ru-win, daughter of Alson and Weni."`
 			choice
 				`	"Thanks. Well, I need to get going."`
 					goto finish
 				`	"That's a nice name, what does it mean?"`
-			`	"Ah, my name means 'The pilot'. The 'Ru' means 'pilot', and names ending in consonants are traditionally used for female Jibauni. Traditional male names usually end in vowels. At any rate, I have some business to attend to, so goodbye."`
-				goto finish
+			`	"Ah, my name means 'The pilot'. A very imaginative name, isn't it? The 'Ru' means 'pilot', and names ending in consonants are traditionally used for female Jibauni. Traditional male names usually end in vowels. At any rate, I have some business to attend to, so goodbye."`
 			label finish
 			branch "knows type"
 				has "Sol-Bound Shuttle: declined"
 			action
 				log "Apparently some Jibauni use their ships without hyperdrives and just shuttle people around the system of Hajay."
 			choice
-				`	"Thanks for talking with me. The non-hyperdrive part of it is a really interesting fact."`
+				`	"Thanks for talking with me. Your story is very interesting."`
 					decline
-				`	"Nice meeting you. Goodbye too."`
+				`	"Nice meeting you too."`
 					decline
 			label "knows type"
 			action
 				log "Just like in Sol, some Jibauni have no hyperdrives on their ships and instead ferry people around the system of Hajay."
 			choice
-				`	"Thanks for talking with me. That is a really interesting fact."`
+				`	"Thanks for talking with me. The fact that you don't use a hyperdrive is quite interesting."`
 					decline
-				`	"Nice meeting you. Goodbye."`
+				`	"It was nice to meet you."`
 					decline
 			label no
 			action
-				set "no jibauni hajay intersystem"
-			`	Well, who knows what was happening there. However, it doesn't concern you in the least, so you continue with your other business.`
+				set "jibauni: didn't ask about hajay intersystem"
+			`	Who knows what was happening there. However, it doesn't concern you in the least, so you continue with your other business.`
 				decline
 			label nothanksship
 			action
-				set "no jibauni hajay intersystem"
-			`	"Well, good luck to you. I have some business now, so goodbye."`
+				set "jibauni: didn't ask about hajay intersystem"
+			`	"Well, good luck to you. I have some business now."`
 				decline
 
 mission "Jibauni Culture: Steak Lovers"
@@ -133,11 +126,10 @@
 	source
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
 	to offer
-		random < 1
+		random < 4
 	on offer
 		conversation
-			`Beside your ship as you touch down are a group of Jibauni children. They are digging a hole in the ground.`
-			`	As you watch, one of them finds a large box. They open it, and inside are three large pieces of meat. The Jibauni children immediately devour it, and toss the box in a nearby dumpster.`
+			`When you land on <origin>, you notice a group of smaller Jibauni, probably children, digging a hole in the ground. As you watch, one of them finds a box with three large pieces of unidentifiable meat inside. The group immediately devours the treat.`
 				decline
 
 mission "Jibauni Culture: Rebel Report"
@@ -146,25 +138,23 @@
 		government "Jibauni"
 	to offer
 		has "language: Jibauni"
-		random < 1
+		random < 2
 	on offer
 		conversation
-			`As you are passing by a restaurant, the door opens, and a small group of Jibauni come out. They are talking about politics, and as you listen, you realize that they are Rebels spying for some reason.`
+			`As you are passing by a restaurant, the door opens, and a small group of Jibauni come out. They are talking about politics, and as you listen, you realize that they are Rebel Jibauni acting as spies.`
 			choice
-				`	(Go report them to the police.)`
-					goto police
-				`	(Confront them.)`
+				`	(Find a police station to report them at.)`
+				`	(Confront them with what you heard.)`
 					goto confront
-			label police
 			action
 				payment 5000
-			`	When you tell the chief what just happened, they immediately send a force to disarm and capture the Rebels. When it turns out that your story was correct, the chief thanks you profusely and gives you a reward of <payment>.`
+			`	After a long search, you find a small police station tucked into the side of a hill. After a brief debate, you are admitted to the chief's office, where you tell them what just happened. A force is immediately dispatched to disarm and capture the Rebels. When it turns out that your story was correct, the chief thanks you profusely and gives you a reward of <payment>.`
 				decline
 			label confront
 			action
 				payment -2000
-			`	The Jibauni act as if they don't know what you are talking about. When you keep pressing claims, one of them pulls out a taser and shoots you.`
-			`	When you wake up, you find that the Jibauni have robbed you and left a message. The message tells you to not be so foolhardy next time, and that they have left the planet, so telling the police will be useless.`
+			`	The strangers act as if they don't know what you are talking about, but after leading you to a dark alley one of them pulls out a taser and zaps you.`
+			`	When you wake up, you find that the spies have robbed you and left a message, which says to not be so foolhardy next time. In addition, they seemingly have left the planet, so telling the police will be useless.`
 				decline
 
 mission "Rebel Jibauni Culture: Rude Rebel"
@@ -173,71 +163,66 @@
 		government "Jibauni (Rebel)"
 	to offer
 		has "language: Jibauni"
-		random < 1
+		random < 6
 	on offer
 		conversation
-			`The part of the spaceport you are currently in is quite interesting, but also seems to be a slum. There are many armed Rebels standing around, and it feels rather strange seeing guns all over the place.`
-			`	A Rebel Jibauni swaggers up to you. "Is this the strange alien who doesn't know how to fight well?" it asks. "Perhaps you should be put off of our planet and all real Jibauni planets. You don't know anything, anyway."`
+			`The part of the spaceport you are currently in seems to be a slum, although some architectual aspects are fascinating. There are many armed Rebels standing around, and, compared to the relative peace of the other Jibauni faction's planets, it is strange to see such a blatant display of weaponry.`
+			`	A Rebel Jibauni swaggers up to you. "Is this the strange alien who does not know how to fight well?" it asks. "Perhaps you should be put off of our planet and all real Jibauni planets. Not that it matters; one like you is unlikely to know how to spy in the first place." Given the Jibauni emphasis on politeness, it seems likely that this Rebel Jibauni is trying to pick a fight with you.`
 			choice
 				`	"I don't think I should leave at all."`
-					goto dontthink
-				`	"You don't even know how to be polite. How rude you are."`
+				`	"I doubt you know how to be polite. How rude you are."`
 					goto rude
 				`	"I take that as a personal insult."`
 					goto Iwasinsulted
-				`	(Quietly walk away.)`
+				`	(Quietly leave.)`
 					goto walkedaway
 			label dontthink
-			`	"Well, you are wrong," replies the Jibauni. "There is nothing you will help us with, anyway."`
+			`	"Well, you are wrong," replies the Jibauni. "There is nothing you could help us with, anyway."`
 			choice
 				`	"Wrong."`
 					goto pretalkbattle
-				`	(Quietly walk away.)`
+				`	(Quietly leave.)`
 					goto walkedaway
 			label rude
 			`	"What!" yells the Rebel. "That is an insult! I cannot ignore this direct affront to my dignity!"`
 				goto talkbattle
 			label Iwasinsulted
-			`	"Who cares," remarks the Rebel. "I sure don't, for one thing. I doubt any other of us does either."`
+			`	"Who cares," remarks the Rebel. "I sure do not, for one thing, and I doubt anyone else does either."`
 				goto talkbattle
 			label pretalkbattle
-			`	"Well, I think I'm right. At any rate, you are a wicked alien scum."`
+			`	"I think I am right, oh alien, so what does your opinion matter?"`
 			label talkbattle
 			choice
-				`	"Yep. You are rude, and no one in the universe can deny it."`
-					goto yourudecantdeny
+				`	"Well, you are rude, and nothing in the universe can deny it."`
 				`	(Quietly walk away.)`
 					goto walkedaway
-			label yourudecantdeny
-			`	"Perhaps not, but I do deny it, and care nothing for any of your thoughts." The Jibauni rudely turns its back on you.`
+			`	"Perhaps not, but I do deny it, and care nothing for any of your thoughts." The Jibauni turns its back on you, another rude gesture in Jibauni culture.`
 			choice
-				`	"Nor do I."`
-					goto nordo
-				`	(Quietly walk away.)`
-				`	(Shoot the rude Rebel Jibauni and leave.)`
+				`	"Nor do I for yours."`
+				`	(Quietly leave.)`
+					goto walkedaway
+				`	(Shoot the rude Rebel and leave.)`
 					goto shot
 				`	"Nor do I. Get out of here."`
 					goto getout
-			label nordo
 			`	"Well, who cares," the Jibauni insults you again, while keeping its back turned.`
 			choice
-				`	"Get out of here."`
-					goto getout
-				`	(Quietly walk away.)`
+				`	"Leave immediately."`
+				`	(Quietly leave.)`
 					goto walkedaway
 				`	(Shoot the rude Rebel and leave.)`
 					goto shot
 			label getout
 			`	The Jibauni whips around to face you. "No. You do."`
-			`	A squad of Rebel Jibauni soldiers come around a corner and forcibly escort you to your ship, then tell you that if you don't leave they will open fire on the <ship>. You decide to leave.`
+			`	A squad of Rebel Jibauni soldiers come around a corner and forcibly escort you to your ship, then tell you that if you don't leave they will open fire.`
 				flee
 			label shot
 			action
 				"reputation: Jibauni (Rebel)" -= 1
-			`	Your shot hits the Rebel squarely in the back, killing it instaneously. You get back to the <ship> without anyone seeing you, and leave immediately.`
+			`	Your shot hits the Rebel squarely in the back, killing it instaneously. You get back to the <ship> without anyone seeing you, and launch immediately.`
 				flee
 			label walkedaway
-			`	You turn and walk away, with the Rebel Jibauni laughing at you the whole while. That did not go very well.`
+			`	You turn and walk away, with the Rebel Jibauni laughing at you the whole while.`
 				decline
 
 mission "Rebel Jibauni Culture: Fleeing Rebel"

data/jibauni/jibauni hails.txt

@@ -219,7 +219,7 @@ phrase "friendly jibauni civilian 2"
 
 phrase "friendly jibauni civilian 3"
 	word
-		"Meet me next time you're on "
+		"Meet me next time you are on "
 	phrase
 		"jibauni planet"
 	word
@@ -509,9 +509,9 @@ phrase "hostile jibauni military"
 
 phrase "hostile disabled jibauni civilian"
 	word
-		"Please don't shoot us! What have we done to you! We "
+		"Please do not shoot us! What have we done to you! We "
 	word
-		"didn't "
+		"did not "
 		"failed to "
 	word
 		"blow you up!"

data/jibauni/jibauni jobs.txt

@@ -252,47 +252,6 @@ mission "Jibauni Passengers [2]"
 		payment 2000
 		dialog "As the group of Jibauni go out of your ship, they each hand you 1/<bunks>th of <payment>."
 
-#mission "Jibauni Risky Tourists"
-#	name "Risk-loving Tourists"
-#	description "These Jibauni are interested in touring non-Jibauni space. Discreetly take them to the marked systems and back for <payment>."
-#	job
-#	repeat
-#	passengers 2 20
-#	clearance "You find coordinates to land where there are no inhabitants."
-#	source
-#		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
-#	to offer
-#		has "language: Jibauni"
-#		random < 10
-#	"distance calculation settings"
-#		"all wormholes"
-#	stopover
-#		distance 2 5
-#		government "Pirate" "Independent" "Free Worlds" "Republic"
-#	stopover
-#		distance 5 8
-#		government "Pirate" "Independent" "Free Worlds" "Republic"
-#	stopover
-#		distance 2 5
-#		government "Diba" "Pirate" "Independent" "Free Worlds" "Republic"
-#	on stopover
-#		conversation
-#			`	As your <bunks> passengers get out to stretch their legs and enjoy the scenary, you hear a patrol coming by with inquiring and perhaps angry thoughts."
-#			choice
-#				`	(Take off, don't risk my life.)`
-#					goto leftbehind
-#				`	"Everyone back on!"`
-#			`	As your passengers hurry back to your ship, you take off. Hopefully that was everyone.`
-#				depart
-#			label leftbehind
-#			`	Well, too bad for those poor Jibauni. You see them being surrounded by the other ships, but decide to take off anyway.`
-#				flee
-#				fail
-#	on complete
-#		payment
-#		payment 10000
-#		dialog "Your passengers walk away, excitedly taking about their trip. You find <payment> in their cabin."
-
 mission "Jibauni Rush Delivery [0]"
 	name "Rush to <planet>"
 	description "A character on <planet> is in dire need of <cargo> before <day>. Get it there by then for the reward of <payment>."

data/jibauni/jibauni missions.txt

@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@
 # You should have received a copy of the GNU General Public License along with
 # this program. If not, see <https://www.gnu.org/licenses/>.
 
-phrase "jibauni man"
+phrase "jibauni male first name"
 	word
 		"Res-redi "
 		"Mi-bala "
@@ -28,7 +28,7 @@ phrase "jibauni man"
 		"Lil-lil-ni "
 		"And-fi "
 
-phrase "jibauni woman"
+phrase "jibauni female first name"
 	word
 		"Nar-yusin "
 		"Narn-phanal "
@@ -47,15 +47,16 @@ phrase "jibauni woman"
 
 phrase "jibauni first name"
 	phrase
-		"jibauni woman"
-		"jibauni man"
+		"jibauni female first name"
+		"jibauni male first name"
 
 news "jibauni speaking jibunese"
 	name
 		word
 			"Jibauni"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -93,6 +94,7 @@ news "hired jibauni assassin male"
 			"Killer"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -116,6 +118,7 @@ news "hired jibauni assassin female"
 			"Killer"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -138,11 +141,12 @@ news "jibauni thief"
 			"Character" 3
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
 		word
-			"Can I borrow your ship? I'll give it back!" 3
+			"Can I borrow your ship? I will definitely give it back!" 3
 			"Let me sell you this prime cut of sansod. Only two thousand credits!" 3
 			"The Jibauni are fools. Get me off this planet."
 			"How many escorts do you have? Not enough? Oh well, someone else maybe."
@@ -156,11 +160,12 @@ news "jibauni chef"
 			"Cook"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
 		word
-			"Know how to cook sealinet? It's terribly hard!"
+			"Know how to cook sealinet? It is terribly hard!"
 			"Any idea what the way is to bake ginedfut? I have no clue!"
 			"I used to be able to cook anything. Now I have lost my skill."
 			"Bring me food, and I will cook it. What do they have in your home space?"
@@ -177,6 +182,7 @@ news "jibauni military captain"
 			"Captain"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -192,13 +198,14 @@ news "jibauni mechanic"
 			"Mechanic"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
 		word
 			"Any clue on the way the Yiyharsi's engines work?"
 			"The Nathar's power generators make no sense at all!"
-			"How on Baitoon are the Saghir's weapons powered? I can't figure it out!"
+			"How on Baitoon are the Saghir's weapons powered? I can not figure it out!"
 		word
 			`"`
 
@@ -212,6 +219,7 @@ news "jibauni merchant"
 			"Pilot"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -229,6 +237,7 @@ news "unemployed jibauni"
 			"Unemployed Youth"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -250,6 +259,7 @@ news "jibauni shipyard captain"
 			"Builder"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -286,6 +296,7 @@ news "jibauni shipyard captain"
 			"Builder"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni" "Jibauni (Rebel)"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			`"`
@@ -296,6 +307,42 @@ news "jibauni shipyard captain"
 		word
 			`"`
 
+news "laqualk"
+	name
+		word
+			"Authorized "
+		word
+			"individual"
+			"government leader"
+			"spacecraft captain"
+	location
+		planet "Laqualk"
+	message
+		word
+			`"`
+		word
+			"We look courageously into the future."
+			"There are rumors of aliens coming through the wormhole."
+			"Rumor has it that you are of the species that arrives through the wormhole."
+			"There are unexplored systems to the south and west. We will be sending an expedition as soon as possible."
+			"Welcome to the planet of Laqualk, captain."
+			"Laqualk is the only planet in Jibauni space without billboards everywhere."
+			"I am glad that there are no advertising billboards on this planet, even if they are everywhere else."
+			"I have got a top scoop from the most recent consultation series; we plan on meeting someone tomorrow."
+			"The assumption is that you know of the Rebels."
+			"Only a few captains have explored the mysterious areas to the west and south."
+			"You are not allowed to hear of the mysterious aliens who visit our space every year. Wait, did I give something away?"
+			"I do not know who figured out the disguise technology, but it sure is handy."
+			"Tribute to the Zon-il company for figuring out the gas giant disguise technology that disguises this planet."
+			"I am not sure if you have met him, but rumor says Kanlanmo is on the High Council."
+			"Kanlanmo - the most important Jibauni in the universe, or the most infamous?"
+			"Aboagye apparently has access to this planet the same way I and you do."
+			"For some strange reason, even the prominent citizen Res-redi is not allowed on this planet."
+			"I have to keep this job top secret, even from my loved ones."
+			"I have to keep this job top secret. Luckily, my parents and family also work here, so I am not deprived of their company."
+		word
+			`"`
+
 phrase "aboagye shipyards advertising"
 	word
 		"in "
@@ -322,6 +369,7 @@ news "aboagye advertising"
 			"Billboard"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			"Buy "
@@ -506,7 +554,7 @@ news "aboagye advertising"
 
 phrase "resredi shipyards advertising"
 	word
-		"What's more"
+		"What is more"
 		"In addition"
 	word
 		", it is "
@@ -547,6 +595,7 @@ news "resredi advertising"
 			"Billboard"
 	location
 		government "Jibauni"
+		not planet "Laqualk"
 	message
 		word
 			"Have you ever "
@@ -563,7 +612,7 @@ news "resredi advertising"
 			"? "
 		word
 			"Look no further, there is one "
-			"Don't look longer, there is one "
+			"Do not look longer, there is one "
 			"There is one right here "
 		word
 			"named "
@@ -588,7 +637,7 @@ news "resredi advertising"
 			"? "
 		word
 			"Look no further, there is one "
-			"Don't look longer, there is one "
+			"Do not look longer, there is one "
 			"There is one right here "
 		word
 			"named "
@@ -612,7 +661,7 @@ news "resredi advertising"
 			"? "
 		word
 			"Look no further, there is one "
-			"Don't look longer, there is one "
+			"Do not look longer, there is one "
 			"There is one right here "
 		word
 			"named "
@@ -636,7 +685,7 @@ news "resredi advertising"
 			"? "
 		word
 			"Look no further, there is one "
-			"Don't look longer, there is one "
+			"Do not look longer, there is one "
 			"There is one right here "
 		word
 			"named "

data/jibauni/jibauni news.txt

@@ -653,7 +653,6 @@ outfit "Small Map"
 outfit "Jibauni Government License"
 	category "Licenses"
 	thumbnail "outfit/jibauni government license"
-	"Jibauni" 1
 	"unplunderable" 1
 	description "This is the license issued to all Jibauni who have helped the government enough. Apparently it can also be gifted to aliens."
 

data/jibauni/jibauni outfits.txt

@@ -137,8 +137,7 @@ planet Landalmon
 	security 0
 
 planet Laqualk
-	attributes government jibauni military
-	# "requires: Jibauni"
+	attributes government jibauni military "requires: inaccessible"
 	landscape land/nasa29
 	description `This is the Jibauni seat of government. There are projectors and other strange technology in an order that looks randomly strewn about, but this electronic equipment is really the high-tech apparatus that makes this planet look like the gas giant it isn't. There is one store, and no trading buildings or job buildings. The single job board is in the store in a conspicuous position.`
 	spaceport `There are only a few buildings here, only the amount required to house the government representatives as well as fueling, repairing, and cleaning the few ships that are authorized to land as well as the knowledge. There are almost no spaceport workers, and only a few landing pads, which, however, are in the best of condition.`