More planet description updates

Author: TheGiraffe3

data/map planets.txt

@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ planet Baitoon
 	description `	Other dinosaurs used to live on this planet, but the Jibauni have transplanted them to a different planet, Owiay, where they thrive and grow much better then they would in a land of T. Rexes.`
 		to display
 			has "jibauni knowledge: dinosaur skulls"
-	spaceport `This is the oldest existing spaceport in Jibauni space, and is filled with many different sizes of hangars and pads to compensate for the large amounts of traffic this planet gets as the third tourist destination in all of Jibauni space. Every buildings here is old, many small and close together.`
+	spaceport `This is the oldest existing spaceport in Jibauni space, and is filled with many different sizes of hangars and pads to compensate for the large amounts of traffic this planet gets as the third tourist destination in all of Jibauni space. Every building here is old, many small and close together.`
 	government Jibauni
 	shipyard "Aboagye Basics"
 	shipyard "Resredi Advanced"
@@ -44,19 +44,19 @@ planet Buhayra
 planet Caya
 	attributes uninhabited
 	landscape land/canyon15
-	description `The natural beauty of Caya is stunning. Rock and tree and bare land are combined here to make a wonderful picture. The world is dark because of the large cloudbanks, but the planet's features are still visible.`
+	description `"Stunning" is the only way to describe the natural beauty of Caya. Rock and tree and bare land combine here to make a wonderful picture. The world is dark because of the large cloudbanks, but the most of the planet's features are still visible.`
 
 planet "Diba Station"
 	attributes diba robot station
 	landscape "land/diba station"
-	description `This is the nicest station the Diba possess. The parts that you have access to are spick and span, polished with the labor of countless helper bots. It appears that this is where the rulers of the Diba live, and also, though you can't see the exact location, where the robots that are the terror of Diba space are produced.`
+	description `This is the nicest station the Diba possess. The parts that you have access to are spick and span, polished with the labor of countless helper bots. It appears that this is where the rulers of the Diba live, and also, though you can't find the exact location, where the robots that are the terror of Diba space are produced.`
 	port "Robot Housing"
-		description `The robots here do not acknowledge your presence, and nothing else exists here to refuel you.`
+		description `The robots here do not acknowledge your presence, and nothing exists here to refuel your type of ship. It is easy to imagine hostile eyes watching you from within buildings.`
 	"required reputation" 20
 	outfitter Diba
 	shipyard Diba
 	bribe 1
-	security 0.99
+	security 0
 
 planet "Gare Station"
 	attributes diba robot station
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ planet "Gare Station"
 	outfitter Diba
 	shipyard Diba
 	bribe 1
-	security 0.99
+	security 0
 
 planet "Jibauni Wormhole"
 	wormhole "Jibauni Wormhole"
@@ -80,9 +80,9 @@ wormhole "Jibauni Wormhole"
 planet Kahbani
 	attributes jibauni
 	landscape land/kahbani
-	description `This is the farming world that feeds Jibauni space. No other planet produces as much food as this one, and the crops that grow well here just so happen to be the ones that are best for Jibauni growth. Thus, the Jibauni are very careful not to let Rebel agents land on this planet, because if someone working for the other side gets in, it could be disastrous.`
-	description `	This planet is in the first system discovered by the Jibauni. The official story was that government ships found it after long periods of trying to make hyperdrives, but common belief says that a captain named Rindil Jibson discovered it just a few hundred years after the Jibauni started.`
-	spaceport `There is not much here in the way of servicing passengers. A few immigrants are scattered about to get checked through, but most of the facilities of this spaceport are for cargo. The area outside the spaceport is immense, and filled with plant colors of all kinds.`
+	description `Kahbani: the farming world that feeds the entirety of Jibauni space. Not a single other planet has such large crop yields, and it just so happens that the food growable here is the best for the Jibauni - that is, when they're not eating meat.`
+	description `	This planet is in the first system discovered by the Jibauni. The official story was that government ships found it after long periods of trying to make hyperdrives, but popular tradition contradicts with the idea that a captain named Rindil Jibson discovered it just a few hundred years after the Jibauni were created - and years before the hyperdrive was invented.`
+	spaceport `Little passenger service lies in the spaceport in the only city on Kahbani. A few immigrants are scattered preparing to officially enter the planet, but the vast majority of Kahbani's facilities carry cargo; another portion to feed Baitoon, one to go to Lamalmuq; it seems that plants fill the whole of the small spaceport.`
 	government Jibauni
 	outfitter "Jibauni Basics"
 	security 0.8
@@ -93,9 +93,9 @@ planet Kahbani
 planet Kanlil
 	attributes jibauni station tourism
 	landscape land/station13
-	description `As the station for the popular destination of Lamalmuq, this place is quite busy, also selling things that are illegal on that planet, such as Luxury Goods. In fact this is where the main trading of the system happens-in the place where all the passengers have layovers.`
-	description `	This station was built fairly recently, only one hundred years ago. The company which built it, though, Dertoy Enterprises, has gone out of business, and most Jibauni think that the station has been there since the beginning.`
-	spaceport `Quite a few Jibauni are walking around, many with black robes. There also many of the Jibauni who wear the uniforms which here are the mark of being a spaceport employee. There are many ships nearby, and many Jibauni unloading and reloading all aspects of them.`
+	description `Kanlil is the stopover for pilgrims wishing to visit Lamalmuq, and as such is quite busy. It also sells luxurious goods unavailable on that planet, such as personal tablets and cigars. Most trading in this system naturally passes through Kanlil.`
+	description `	Surprisingly, the station is a fairly recent creation, only built two hundred years ago. Dertoy Enterprises, the original founder, went out of business soon afterwards; this contributes to the rumor that Kanlil has existed since the beginning of time as the Jibauni know it.`
+	spaceport `Most Jibauni loitering on Kanlil wear black robes; the rest wear the generic spaceport employee uniforms that permeate Jibauni space. Many ships are docked ot the station, and the spaceport workers are kept busy unloading and reloading the large amounts of traffic in Hajay.`
 	government Jibauni
 	shipyard "Aboagye Basics"
 	shipyard "Resredi Basics"
@@ -116,10 +116,10 @@ planet Khariq
 planet Lamalmuq
 	attributes jibauni pilgrims tourism
 	landscape land/lamalmuq
-	description `This planet has a religious significance to the Jibauni. There are many of them here, wearing simple black robes and walking in twos and threes. There also are many religious buildings and none of the pubs and bars expected on a normal planet. Billboards are posted everywhere advertising something impossible to read.`
+	description `Lamalmuq is the center of Jibauni religion. Many Jibauni roam on the surface, wearing simple black robes. There also are many religious buildings and none of the pubs and bars that would be expected on a normal planet. Billboards are posted everywhere advertising something impossible to read.`
 	description `	This is the planet of the gods to the Jibauni. Their ancient legends tell of a place where the rulers of the universe lived, and where all was quiet and peaceful.`
 	description `	This, they believe, is that planet, and so have been very careful not to spoil it.`
-	spaceport `The spaceport here has many ships landing and taking off. But there are not many cargo handling facilities, and only a few ships look as if they were built for carrying cargo, while the number of passenger transports is great. Many Jibauni are in the bustle of security and luggage scanning that is common to most of their worlds. There is only one city; all the rest of the planet seems untouched by the Jibauni.`
+	spaceport `Compared to other Jibauni planets, and the station of Kanlil nearby, Lamalmuq is quite sparsely populated in the matter of spacecraft. Most of the ships are built for the sole purpose of passenger transport. One city exists on the surface; every other continent is untouched by any Jibauni methods.`
 	government Jibauni
 	outfitter Lamalmuq
 	"required reputation" 10
@@ -131,8 +131,7 @@ planet Lamalmuq
 planet Landalmon
 	attributes jibauni moon uninhabited
 	landscape land/dune1
-	description `This moon does not seem to be very important to the Jibauni. There appears to have been hardly any work on developing it, and the few buildings that remain are just small blobs of plastic.`
-	description `	It is mostly filled with giant dunes of sand and rock.`
+	description `This moon does not seem to be very important to the Jibauni. Hardly any work has been put into developing it, and the few buildings that remain are just small blobs of plastic. It is mostly filled with giant dunes of sand and rock.`
 	bribe 0
 	security 0
 
@@ -153,9 +152,7 @@ planet Laqualk
 planet Ligastoli
 	attributes uninhabited
 	landscape land/ligastoli
-	description `Ligastoli is a wonderful world, with lush greenery much like ancient rice terraces. In fact, it is remarkably like Earth, except for the wildlife.`
-	description `	The only animals here, your ship's computer decides, are called Stoli, and are a mix between a fox and a raccoon. They seem to live in trees.`
-	description `	Nothing else exists on the lush slopes of Ligastoli.`
+	description `Ligastoli is a wonderful world, with lush greenery much like ancient rice terraces. In fact, it is remarkably like Earth, except for the wildlife. The only animals here, your ship's computer decides, are called Stoli, and are a mix between a fox and a raccoon. They seem to live in trees. Nothing else exists on the lush slopes of Ligastoli.`
 
 planet "Mahata Station"
 	attributes diba robot station
@@ -165,18 +162,17 @@ planet "Mahata Station"
 	outfitter Diba
 	shipyard Diba
 	bribe 1
-	security 0.99
+	security 0
 
 planet Makhi
 	attributes uninhabited
 	landscape land/makhi
-	description `Makhi is filled with pools of bubbling liquid and rocks jutting high into the air. Poisonous algae covers the surface of the water, and steam is continually rising. This planet could be easily regarded as "spooky".`
+	description `Makhi is filled with pools of bubbling liquid and rocks jutting high into the air. Poisonous algae covers the surface of the water, and steam is continually rising. This planet could be easily regarded as spooky to captains not versed in the methods of science.`
 
 planet Minmanmun
 	attributes jibauni mining "rebel jibauni" terraformed
 	landscape land/minmanmun
-	description `This is the first planet the Rebel Jibauni have terraformed. Unfortunately, they seem to have only cared about external looks, because even a little outside the city, the true landscape takes over and rock strikes in.`
-	description ``
+	description `Minmanmun: the first planet the Rebel Jibauni ever terraformed. Unfortunately, they seem to have only cared about external looks to inhabitants of main population centers, because even a little outside the city, the true landscape takes over and rock strikes in.`
 	description `	This planet is also a mining planet, so the rock has great scars in it at places and there are many machines to do the digging, which are scattered around parked looking very untidy.`
 	spaceport `When coming down for landing, most of what can be seen is rock, though ships above the city see nothing but planets and trees, due to the haphazard nature of the Rebels that terraformed this planet. However, once down, the streets are wide and cool, with luxurious buildings and shady pathways.`
 	spaceport `	This was built by Reshi, a Jibauni who spearheaded the Rebel movement. She still lives and fights today.`